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Chapter 1: Limbo
https://www.nomorecontempt.org/short/chapter-1/
Sofy123, 2026-09-13 — the words it was on have changed.
At some level, you know that they could only have done what they did by being turned away from their victims. Check if that’s true. So what you were actually showing them is something closer to
Had to read the next paragraph to know what you were trying to say.
Suggestion:
…. Wouldnt you?
If you think about it, you acted poorly or even hurt them with your contempt, because you turned away from their hummanity. Couldnt it be possible that they did the same when they hurt their victims?
Why is that that when they turn away, it means they are bad, and when you turn away it means you are good? Is it only because you can tell yourself that they are a bad person?
** I changed the you/they here. Also understand the complexity of writing your book as I’m making suggestions. Hope you get the intention of the suggestion.. not claiming it fixes the issue.
The issue I am noticing is that here there was a big jump, and being more explicit as to what is happening would be helpful.
Chapter 1: Limbo
https://www.nomorecontempt.org/short/chapter-1/
monktastic, 2026-09-13 — the words it was on have changed.
appropriate punishment
The least you could do
Chapter 1: Limbo
https://www.nomorecontempt.org/short/chapter-1/
Sofy123, 2026-09-13 — the words it was on have changed.
their reaction gives you
I’m adding comments as to how to make it explicit what you are pointing out.
suggestion: But notice how your contempt creates the self-justifying reaction in them that now gives you proof that they are irredeemable.